ArmouredGRIFFON's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Muffin Man]

You are a strong writer and a great artist! You would get all five stars but, you creeped me out and this is catagorized as an original comedy. There is no way I am giving you five stars: on the premises that I wanted to laugh and now I'm scared.

:(

Gi-go responds:

But you see, I now get to laugh about you being scared. See how this works?

Thank you!

[Dragon Ball Multiverse 1]

This only gets 3 stars for the story. As an animation as a whole it was very lacking. The narration was not standardised, but in virtue of that I can see where you tried to place emphasis.

But the story was great and you emulated the nature of the characters perfectly. I was ready to click it off but it was somehow, very, compelling.

This is a list of what you need-
Proficient Animators
Voice Acting
A secondary writer to help you with your work

If you go to the Flash Forum, and Collabs section I am sure you will find these things.

With the right people you may actually be able to create your own Dragon-Ball Saga.

Good Luck.

bocodamondo responds:

go figure...

[LL-RockBattle:Wine VS MP3]

It was really well presented

Characters worked well and were really well sort of represented which is one of the things I look for in a flash, how the characters communicate with each other and how effectively that adds to the story. The joke was quite funny and was sort of enhanced by all of what I just said!

The characters were good the animation was brilliant in character representation.

Keep it up! I hope to see more just like this! Its a good thing you were in a rush. I think if you had done any more it would have really dragged on and gotten stale. For what you were trying to achieve (dramatic irony) I think you hit it nail on the head with the timing on it all. It wasn't too short, where I would get a small chuckle but it wasn't too long that I get bored. That medium in timing is essential, and though the length of time these things should go on is all relative, because you given yourself substantial time to set it all up right with the characters in particular it worked really well. I just found it really funny! Sort of like Leo & Satan funny, not because of the jokes but more to do with the timing.

That being said I think you should put yourself a time limit in making flashes and then think what can I do to make it better. The fact that you were rushed only seems to have contributed to the character presentation. For example when the, wine bottle is sort of startled at the end of the solo with the white background, you can tell you rushed that but the very abruptness of it leaves it more effective then if you did something really fancy and graphical.

I'm going to leave you with an example of how the same principle is applied in writing.

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Chekov's advice is that drama is heightened during passages of markedly tighter writing, and therefore if one wants to punctuate the tension of a moment one should describe it "cooly", using as few descriptors as possible. If you have written a good story the sentence "There's a kid out there; he's big, and he's mean, and he's kind of scared." is more powerful than "Through the window you can see a kid. He's a hulking figure, has a reputation for a short fuse. Yet, I can't help feeling that inside he's just a scared little boy

src: http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1 241883
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Good job! 8/10. Because there is always "lots of" room for improvement.

TwistedGrim responds:

...what are you talking about? D:

[VG Cats Animated 2]

I hate flashes like this

Flashes which don't deserve front page but get boosted by 13 year olds by the obvious VG/Meme reference.

Though the joke was kind of funny but it wasn't front page worthy. You could have made more out of it in my opinion, but todays front page is getting crappier and crappier.
3/5

MikeandTreyVideo responds:

Yeah, but those same 13 year olds blam the crap out of the good stuff as well for being either too short or nonsensical.

If the joke was funny, why isnt it front page worthy? Also, it's based off someone elses idea and really didn't off much for me to tweak.

[Predicting The Future]

To all the noobs out there

The reason hes making so many ers and um sounds is because it's authentic speech. Everybody does that when they are speaking spontaneously. They are called fillers, and linguistically indicate the brain is processing.

Have a nice day. Great er movie I, um... Kin. Guess.

M4KBOT responds:

Yeah, he was pretty much just speaking off the top of his head when we recorded this. Thanks for the review.

[Cooking (bocodamondo)]

Animation was choppy and not good but.

I still thought it had a quality plot with some humor dashed into it.

bocodamondo responds:

well...

[CC - Random Violence!]

Simple.

See that clock on your lock?

Yeh that tells the time? It made me on time for a night out!

I have my start menu clock tucked away, not always noticable!

So thank you very much! :D

Tails-Lock responds:

No problem, though I forget who originally made it with the time telling abilities. But I am glad I could help somehow.

[Dick Neck: Origins]

Unstable Tactical Nuke!

You put my A Star in English to shame! Bravo!

Galneda responds:

lol, thanks very much!

[All Your Owls]

Hey paradox

I saw this on the bbs the thread you made about posting the owl pics to make All Your Owls me and starfox_clock aka: me would of contributed but they were both on ban.
Anyway im happy to see this made it past judgement

Much <3

~ Razor_26k

Paradox responds:

Hehe, thanks a lot, I'm glad you liked it

[[2005] Clock Tutorial]

I cannot

Post in the cc forums I have made an account and charicter but it wont let me help so I can become powerful

Bbqbeefburgerman responds:

You cant post because there is week of lurking before you can post. But i guess you can post already.